Working with my Critical Friend

Today we partnered up with a critical friend, who's job is to spot the mistakes in your writing and helped us to see it and fix it. It was really helpful, because my critical friend found a few errors that I never realised was there. After commenting on the writing, we referenced the writing toolbox to see what level we are on and what we can do better. In the toolbox, there are many different sections of how to improve and score the text, along with things you can do to go to the next level.

T4 Goals

How to Make Vanilla Ice-Cream

Independent & Dependent Clauses

We worked on a Google drawing about what makes independent and dependent clauses different from each other.

Procedural Writing

Prsuasive Writing

This is a Prezi made by me and Tim from room 5.

Current Events

A summary of an article on Kiwi Kids News.

Spelling

Today's spelling was hard, since most of the words sound the same with the others. Like wood and would, aisle and isle.

Spelling

The new word I learnt was penicillin. I also know that mayonnaise is a type of sauce/dressing made with egg yolk and oil. This is my example of using penicillin: The nurse used some penicillin to treat the infection.

Anzac Assembly

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Go to this link to read.

Spelling

This week's spelling is the same as last week. I practised receiving, and got 100%.

T2 Goals

This is my goals for Term 2.

Spelling

This is my spelling result for the last week of Term 1.
The hardest words are prophesied and prophesying, because I always mix up the Y.
I got receiving wrong because I typed the I and E the wrong way.

Spelling Test 2

The hardest word was guacamole, because it sounds like 'guacomole'.
Also, I always mistype the e in exempt.

Ancestral Poem

First we took a photo of our fingerprint, then our teacher enlarged it.  We traced around the lines, then got a new piece of paper to write our poem on it.

Spelling

I took me around 10 tries to get 100%. The hardest word in my opinion is heterogeneous, but I still managed to remember it.  I always mistype thirtieth and calculator.

Connective

Nana and Poppa lived in the countryside, but Nana disliked living in the countryside. One day, she and Poppa headed over to visit us in the city. Later, she didn’t want to return home after she came to our house. Poppa had to go home alone, and fetch her the next day. Poppa chatted to mum and they decided to let nana stay in the city. Soon, they sold their old countryside house and came to live with us. It took very long to settle in, but it was worth it. I was really glad that they came to live with us.

We worked in a group to make the short story sound better. We added time connectives, descriptive words, and replaced boring words with interesting words to it more fascinating.

Onomatopoeia Writing

Tssssssss. I heard the sound from my room, three metres away.  I rushed to the kitchen.  It’s eight in the morning, and I'm preparing for school.  There was smoke everywhere, and more, coming from the microwave.  It’s still going.  I quickly cancelled it, and opened the microwave door.  More smoke came out, this time more darker.  It was then I recalled I was heating up garlic bread, and there it was, inside the microwave, was a piece of coal-black piece of bread on a badly burnt plate.

I quickly took the garlic bread and plate out, and stuffed the bread into the rubbish bin.  The plate was burnt in places, and there are even huge pimple-like bubbles on the surface.  I left it on the counter, not knowing what to do with it.  The smoke is clearing out, but there are still a lot of it in the room.  Luckily it isn’t going to the living room.  Then my mum came into the room.

First, she asked me what happened.  I told her how I pressed the 10 minutes button instead of the 10 seconds button.  She was very angry with me, but at least the microwave isn't broken.  She open the air vent, and threw the plate into the rubbish bin.  My mum said that she’ll deal with me when I got home from school, since it was nearly 8:15.  I suddenly remembered that there’s school today.  I left the cleaning up to my mum, and went to school.

Compared to other times, she wasn't as angry when I came home.  I did some dishes and laundry, then it was all OK.  The loss was a plate and some bread.  But when you open the microwave, it still smelt of burnt wood.

We learnt to start a recount with an onomatopoeia.

Language Features in Music Lyrics

Coraline

My favourite part of Coraline is the dark feeling of the movie.   It just makes everything different, or spooky, in a way that I like.  It is made for children around 10, or even teens.  Adults tend to like it too, but as a horror story while children think of it as an adventure.  Coraline is one of my favourite movie’s of all time.

It all started when Coraline Jones moved into a creepy new house.  She is always bored, since her parents are always busy and when they’re not, they ignore her.  So she explored around the new house which is split into three parts.  Coraline visited the two retired actress’ who are living in the same part and a man who is training a mouse circus, which is all very weird.  Anyways, she is still bored and her dad who is doing nothing told her to count all the doors in the house.  It is then she came across a door with a brick wall behind it.  She experimented with the door a bit, and went to bed after eating dinner.

Coraline woke up in the middle of the night, woken up by the squeaking sounds the mice under her bed are making.  She followed the mouse, because she thought she would not go back to sleep anyway or just random curiosity to the bricked door earlier.  Strangely, the mouse can pass through the door.  Coraline opened the door, and the brick wall disappeared.  Instead of the brick wall, there is a peculiar tunnel.  She climbed through the tunnel, and ended up in her house where she just was.  But something’s different.  The house is decorated nicely, and her parents have buttons instead of eyes.

The Coraline movie is based on the book by Neil Gaiman, which is also named Coraline.  The movie is made by using stop motion, and as you all know stop motion films are very hard to make.  I watched the movie 2 times, one time when I was about six and I thought of the movie as a horror movie.  Now that I’m year 7, it just looks like an adventure story.